Matt Bellamy

I'm picking up on things here that you may or may not have intentionally touched on. Fore example: "Where snow always fell". It always fell, did it? Was the boy ...

Well it's catchy. At the moment it seems little more than an outlet of angst, which I don't begrudge you, I do it often. But if you want to improve ...

Ooh, I like. You touch on a feeling of unity, and I think you could develop that more-is this a romantic unity? Or am I just in a romantic mood? ...

This left me confused. I didn't find it particularly easy to read, and got confused as to whether you want to talk or you want answers. Or do you want ...

Ditto Snoink, I wasn't sure about that line either, it was kind of hard for me to get my head around. Apart from that, I like this very much. It's ...

"The moon hangs high in the sky, full, mysterious, and dark Shadowed clouds roll cautiously across the starless sky" Might sound better if you took the first sky out...that way ...

You didn't keep to one rhyming pattern-some stanzas had the rhyming pattern ABCB, some were ABBC, and some had no rhyming at all. It would flow much easier if you ...

You need to sort out your...what are they called, italic thingies. [/i] goes at the end of the text, not [i] Apart from that, I quite liked this. You kept ...

She sits in a corner bloody and bruised Bloodied might sound better here. Also this is a good place for some imagery. Thinking of how life should have been She ...

When you disappear was a great way to end it, I thought. A suggestion, that the second repetition (We’re falling away from/Falling so far from/Reality?) could be slightly different from ...

Loved the first stanza, great metaphor. I don't think the ... (there's a word for that, but it escapes me at the moment) was needed in the last line or ...

I can't find anything wrong with this because I don't really understand it. However, I can tell you the bits I thought worked well: inhibiting your drawing-blanks your nothing-thoughts... bloodied, ...

Cellophane regrets. Very nice. I don't like "that" at the beginning of that line, and some of the poem didn't seem to flow very well, but you played with imagery ...

I liked it. But here: And wondering who'll catch me Please say that someone will catch me Catch me and save me from that deadly fall I felt there were ...

Yay for alliteration! Rest in peace please peace please peace please Love that. EDIT: Sorry, I voted wrong cuz I assumed yes would be at the top and no would ...